How does this MESSAGE sound which I'm sending to a GIRL....?

I met a girl at a friends wedding last October 2009. This girl is my friend's sister-in-law. I met this girl while dancing at the wedding. My parents also went to the wedding. Initially, she invited my parents to dance out of respect. Then I strated to dance with her for some of the night. I tried to add her as a friend on facebook but she declined my request. My thought was that she might have forgotten who I was. I am thinking of trying 1 more time and sending her a facebook add request with the following message:





';Hey, This is Rick. I'm one of Matt's friends. I met u on the dancefloor at Matt and Sarah's wedding in Vancouver. I was in a disco groove on the dancefloor lol. So how ya been? How's the studies going?How does this MESSAGE sound which I'm sending to a GIRL....?
it sounds genuine! whats the worse that could happen?How does this MESSAGE sound which I'm sending to a GIRL....?
Use real words instead of things like ';u'; and ';lol'; and ';ya'; to demonstrate that you have more than a 16-year-old's level of grammar and effort, and it would be fine. Maybe include your last name as well, she may not even remember you.
sounds good mate
sounds good to me...
I think she told you everything you need to know when she declined your Facebook request. Let it go.